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    dots Submission Name: Unknowingly Beautifuldots
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    Author: BCute
    ASL Info:    23/F/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 1295/1417/363
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 138
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 870



    Description:
       This is to all the girls. Who walk through life, never getting told they're beautiful. We're all beautiful. Whether somenoe says so or not. So, smile, lift your head. Whether you go home alone or not, you most likely left someone behind stunned and in awe


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    The poignant beauty cascades down
    radiating in waves to those around
    watching, waiting as she walks
    the crowd parts, quieting talk.

    Not aware or concious of it
    filling a glass with water
    lips iced pink sip
    eyes gaze uncomprehending to stares.

    Conversing with her melodic voice
    either ignoring or ignorant
    of the lingering stares
    of admiration, she laughs.

    Time stands still as music is made
    others join unable to avoid
    with how she lights the room
    and fills it with joy.

    Clanging on the clock announces the time
    an announcement that she must take her leave
    leaves all watching her walk away
    the beauty never knowing...

    never having been told

    goes home

    alone.




    Submitted on 2007-07-14 13:33:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      So pretty.

    This reminds me of the scene from the movie "Closer," when Natalie Portman is walking down the street, and she is so gorgeous that everyone turns and looks at her.

    I think it's awesome that you can see this beauty in someone that doesn't see it in them.

    Great job. This is as beautiful as you say she is...
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I differ with you that a beautiful girl does not know that she is being admired and fancied. Something in the eyes can be read in sole glance. Beauty definitely adorns the ambience.
    | Posted on 2007-07-14 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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