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    dots Submission Name: Every Inch of Hatedots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 593/819/331
    Words: 275
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsEvery Inch of Hatedots
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    Summer sleeps quickly, neath the autumn leaves,
    Alone in struggle comes the day I waltz my dying journey.
    If dreams would not deceive me, this heart wouldn't have ruptured,
    But for the rules of life, sometimes every rapture is indentured.

    Oh neath the stars I used to lay,
    To those burning idols, how childishly I used to pray.
    Of early momentum's that awoke me from peace,
    Now I have yearned to stray from heaven for the father underneath.

    Black velvet comforts my heart,
    Like the slithering Libido that tore Eden apart.
    In every single sacred heart beat,
    I can feel the presence of my masters beast.

    I wish for the dusk to destroy the light,
    To take me, and blind me from God's sights,
    And nestle me in fortune and glory in hells legion,
    To rampart the world in it's finale's of reasons.

    I wish through hissing black ebony,
    For my dark princess to arise once more and kiss me,
    And side by side, hand in hand, we create the deadliest weapon,
    That would bring fear upon the eyes of everyone.

    To share the last victory would be pleasured,
    To burn every soldier of God to a stake would bring laughter.
    To watch as angels blood stain the snowy white moon,
    And watch the human life fall to it's last doom.

    Oh how I urge to watch rivers turn deeply to blood,
    To watch brother and brother kill instead of love.
    To watch this historical fiction of this holy lie phase to reality,
    I would feel free, as I've longed to get every inch of hate out of me.




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      Intense and darkly arousing. Wonderful hatred and powerful words fill my empty soul reading this scripture. Loved it. Dug the usage of "neath" very unique. Impressive how each stanza is four lines of pure illusion allowing the pathways of my mind to spin through the literature. Not sure if you like him but Danzig would eat this up. Hail you for these hateful lines.

    "To burn every soldier of God to a stake would bring laughter"- yes demented yet well written.
    So many other lines I can't tell you the upheave of anger and murder running through my viens as I looked into your minds eye of fire.
    If you write this well of hatred do it more, speak it to the youth and rise against the hypocrites.
    Keep it up- you got me all worked up.
    | Posted on 2007-07-15 00:00:00 | by mudge | [ Reply to This ]


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