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    dots Submission Name: emotion and governmentdots
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    Author: eagle wing
    ASL Info:    15/m/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 29/34/24
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/
    Total Views: 699
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 629



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    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsemotion and governmentdots
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    emotions and government are alot the same

    dictateing the way we do things

    forceing us to see what they think they know is right

    but they never know

    for only God knows how this rule will end

    in glorious victory

    or radical change

    or total anarchy

    in the long run though

    it is us

    as we are

    who shape and form

    these crumbling walls

    that is eaither our sanity

    or more importantly

    our life





    Submitted on 2007-07-14 19:29:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i keep coming back to this one, debating whether or not to comment. I don't get the whole double spacing thing, so everything felt vaguely unconnected. i loved the whole

    what they think they know is right.

    that is so true and it was really a cool line. i dunno. this poem didn't rock my blocks nearly as much as your other ones do. but may thats just because i have read it too much and analyzed it to death. anyhow, not too shabby. but i feel theres more here.

    i tip my hat and bid thee (a subdued) farewell.
    | Posted on 2008-05-30 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]


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