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    dots Submission Name: A Mixed Emotion Weddingdots
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    Author: BCute
    ASL Info:    23/F/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 1295/1417/363
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 166
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    Description:
       I went to an ex's wedding yesterday. There were a lot of underlying emotions and thoughts the whole ceremony. Awkward.


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    White lace, a sheer gown
    trumpets call out proud.
    A congregation stands
    turns to stare in awe.

    Yet, a head in the crowd
    isn't watching her
    is turned staring
    watching his reaction.

    A black tuxedo, his face set
    she thinks he looks
    perhaps too serious
    a face made of stone.

    Looking a little scared
    she hopes it's just nerves
    and not him changing his mind
    this has got to work.

    Everyone sits slowly
    some crying happy tears
    this heart is mourning
    the loss of innocence.

    The loss of a past
    giving it up and away
    with placement of rings
    mixed emotions stir.

    She can stop loving him now
    as the groom kisses the bride
    they leave the church Mr. and Mrs.
    and, she breathes relaxed.




    Submitted on 2007-07-15 11:07:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem has wonderful and powerful meter that draws the reader in nearly impercptibly. This is a very, very excellent poem, indeed! I loved it, absolutely loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo... michael
    | Posted on 2007-07-17 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      OUCH!
    That's a tough ordeal to experiece.
    There is a movie called "Brown Sugar" in which a scene such as this is present.
    You should rent it sometime, and see what you think.
    | Posted on 2007-07-16 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]


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