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    dots Submission Name: *suddenly I am waking*dots
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    Author: Cherub Winter
    ASL Info:    21/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 17/20/11
    Words: 317
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 1050
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Um... this is a really personal one and my interpretation is probably a little to farfetched to understand. so make your own interpretation, im curious to see what someone else would get out of this.


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    dots*suddenly I am waking*dots
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    Suddenly I see
    I am down on my knees
    My wrists are chained to the street
    I give up hope, and accept defeat
    The headlights only mock me
    They cock, twist and stalk me
    Then suddenly I am waking
    It's bitter cold and I am shaking

    But in the darkness I thought I saw
    Its shadow walking on the wall
    A mystery you ragged doll,
    I hear my voice, but feel your call
    I already know what you will wear
    I saw you standing there
    I couldn't help but stare
    30 gauge stalletos, and a violet blossom dress
    Or I will have you any way, I could care none the less
    Only you could make me feel this way
    Same sweet love on a different damned day
    Then suddenly I'm waking
    drowned in sweat and violently shaking

    I remember seeing you briefly that night
    You made yourself scarce so we would not fight
    I was surrounded by nostalgia and familiar faces
    all dissapointed I won't make their acquaintance
    I felt so alone among all of these souls
    With the screaming in my veins and the dryness of these poles
    So I took a flame to this place we would meet
    Watched it burn and took back to the street
    I thought it was kind of hot that day
    I remember seeing you briefly that night
    As much as it hurts, there was nothing to say
    Just leave me to be, I'm just doing whats right.
    Suddenly I am waking
    I am scared and I am shaking

    I made it through unto the dawn
    I never thought that night would be gone
    Still winding through the hair of sleep
    I freed the life I thought i'd keep
    I will always remember you though
    violet blossom dress, and soothing stalleto
    You are always a part me you ragged doll
    Forever hear your echo, everlong your call.




    Submitted on 2007-07-15 12:00:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yea this was a interresting read. Several things came to mind about the meaning, I am getting the feeling of a death, maybe or maybe less violent but close to the same a violent break up. Either way I really liked it for the fact it keeps your mind wondering thoughout the poem creating the urge to reach the end. Loved it.

    ~~Donna~~
    | Posted on 2007-08-19 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      The aftermath of things that once scar people tend to stick with them throughout life and within dreams. This write tells me that those visions still haunt you.

    'I felt so alone among all of these souls
    With the screaming in my veins and the dryness of these poles'

    My favorite part just because I can almost hear you speaking it just by reading it. You have a unique way with the expression of your words and I dont mean just through your poetry.

    This is my favorite write from your archive so far. It's a [censored] that the past can still linger around with a vengence. I guess that's just our lesson and curse though.
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by spacedoutboy | [ Reply to This ]
      and another thing, I liked how you left people wondering. it probably left yourself wondering, Who was that Lady? It was really good :]
    | Posted on 2007-07-15 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this. It was very descripive and it really put a picture in my mind. This poem really puts you in a imaginitive world.
    You have really good and original rhymes.
    Really nice work
    This ones going to the favorites :]
    | Posted on 2007-07-15 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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