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NOT DONE


Author: DontLetGo421
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Words: 79
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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NOT DONE



running away trying my hardest not to turn
this is my test and i've been trying to learn
as i look on forward, the road begins to lengthen
i become helpless walking along the road made to strengthen
but each step brings me back where i've been
i ponder on why you have even been sent
you've been away so long that i'm afraid to see you now
i would use your power but i'm afraid ive forgotten how




Submitted on 2007-07-15 22:15:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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