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    dots Submission Name: For Loridots
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    Author: Anticlownperson
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere land
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 248/390/118
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 777
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 460



    Description:
       To the one girl who manages to get under my skin every time I see her. Even if you're never mine, love, at least we'll always have that.


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    dotsFor Loridots
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    How did I go so long
    without hearing your
    voice, low and trembling?
    Without our little games
    all in fun but with
    a silent plea that
    you're not just wanting,
    that it's my touch
    that you want.
    I'm asking you questions,
    all in jest, perhaps,
    but I'm hoping you're
    taking this as seriously
    as I think I am.




    Submitted on 2007-07-15 23:07:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this write
    To me in this write you are showing how big of an impact this woman has made on your life though you have never truly ever had any relations
    WELL WORDED
    It was really good to see you posting again
    I missed reading your writes
    God Bless
    Ron

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    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-07-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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