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Author: Jose Ragnos
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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She was taken away from me many years ago,
All of the memories buried under layers of snow.
Everyday that passes by I find myself wondering
Where you are on this Earth as I’m morning.

There was nothing for me to live for after me
Leaving her not knowing what I never did see.
A woman who gave her complete love as I
Always seemed to have turned a blind eye.

Tonight, right now, I have found my prize
As it was clouded with a strong disguise.
I took her in my arms and I have vowed
To be with her like the sky has her cloud.

She has never been away from my heart
As long as my mind has remained smart.
This magic moment has always been there,
Like the day she gave me her first stare.

I have made one mistake so long ago,
Now we shall dance on top of the white snow.

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