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    dots Submission Name: Love Tragedydots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 675
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsLove Tragedydots
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    This is a story of a teenage girl
    So broken down and torn up inside
    A love that left her down, bruised.. hurt
    She's one caught up in the spiderweb
    Of lies and doubt, tears are shed
    Down and can't get up, broken
    Doomed for such mistakes
    These scars scream out
    "Don't love again dear
    You'll only get hurt"

    This is a story of a young man
    Mysterious ways... sweet talking
    Spun a spiderweb of lies and doubt
    Took her beaten heart and crushed it
    Those lovely words.. actions were done
    Consequences he dug into the ground
    Took everything for granted, mistake
    Words he twisted.. emotions dead
    He said "I love you".. sadly, a lie
    Played her like the fool she is
    He left her there all broken
    As he slowly choked her
    With those soft words




    Submitted on 2007-07-16 18:27:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      creatively done. the idea of choking her with "i love you" was very well thought of. show's the pain a man like that does to a woman. a good write, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2007-07-17 00:00:00 | by damienelizabeth | [ Reply to This ]
      it sounds true for most guys my friend dates. i've only dated one guy and still with him ^_^ but hope he isn't like.."this mysterious guy," he is sweet tho, but who knows rite? love it tho, even if it is a love tradgedy.
    ~*alexis*`
    | Posted on 2007-07-16 00:00:00 | by darkwiccan14 | [ Reply to This ]


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