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    dots Submission Name: always be youdots
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    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsalways be youdots
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    staying in when i should really be out
    i long for a smile but cant help but pout
    'cause when i dream its always of you
    ive tried and tried but i'm stuck like glue

    i leap on forward with big smiles and all
    with no ground to stand on, i slip and i fall
    'cause when i close my eyes its always you
    i'll try and i'll try again but it'll always be you




    Submitted on 2007-07-16 20:32:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a good poem, the only bad thing is it ends to soon you know? i like what it says though about trying to forget him but you cant i know all to well how that is. well keep up the good work. Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-07-17 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]


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