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always be you
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always be you
staying in when i should really be out
i long for a smile but cant help but pout
'cause when i dream its always of you
ive tried and tried but i'm stuck like glue
i leap on forward with big smiles and all
with no ground to stand on, i slip and i fall
'cause when i close my eyes its always you
i'll try and i'll try again but it'll always be you
Submitted on 2007-07-16 20:32:25
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this is a good poem, the only bad thing is it ends to soon you know? i like what it says though about trying to forget him but you cant i know all to well how that is. well keep up the good work. Joanna
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