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    dots Submission Name: Daughter's Love (Addition to Mother's Lodots
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    Author: EbonyBlood
    ASL Info:    14/F/Can.
    Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 79/79/73
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 1092
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       Uhm..You should check out Mother's Love first.. >_>; Just saying. It might be easier to understand.


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    dotsDaughter's Love (Addition to Mother's Lodots
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    Giving me the special right of life, granted I always wished you hadn't.
    Though now I am very glad you gave birth to me, my hair was brown, now dyed black.
    Make-up surrounds my blue eyes, I got from you. I'll always remember being angry at your protective ways, though remember being happy with you there on my first school days.
    I'll remember learning to ride a bike with you, how you hardly knew too. We would always laugh when I fell.
    Though now, I wish I had shown you how much I really cared, and how much I still do care. How I'll love you till the end of time, and always be ready to reach heaven and be in your arms again.
    I know you'll see my wedding day, even if you aren't by my side. I'll always love you, and I'll know you're there.
    Though you are gone, All our good and bad times have come, though I want you to know.

    I can never compare, the love I share with you.
    I love you Mother.




    Submitted on 2007-07-17 10:43:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Again as i said in your motther love one i wished you put more imagery in this. Still i admire your honest writing in love for your mother and salute you for it. I guess though that for some things its better to speak plainly and not deviate from it with replacement words. I would have used imagery cause i guess in some things i find it easier to conceal emotions with symbols. So strength to you for this and hope that you always hold your love for you mother.

    fine job :)
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by Seraphim X | [ Reply to This ]


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