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    dots Submission Name: Hate me (unfinished)dots
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    Author: kapri49
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 31/69/30
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 636
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 228



    Description:
       This is the start of a song about me and my ex. Let me know what you think. P.S. This is the chorus.


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    dotsHate me (unfinished)dots
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    I want you to hate me
    For everything I ever did
    I want you to hate me
    For Everything I never said
    Oh Won't you hate me
    For pushing you right to the edge
    Ooo please hate me




    Submitted on 2007-07-17 21:24:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this vaguely makes me think of that band [blue october?] with their song Hate Me:

    Hate me today
    Hate me tomorrow
    Hate me for all the things I didn't do for you
    Hate me and wait, yeah wait for it to swollow
    Hate me so you can finally see whats good for you


    this is their refrain/chorus.
    i dont know... yours sounds very the same in sentiment which makes me think perhaps you could find a way that hasnt been used to express this relatioship and its termination.

    what are you going to benefit from this person hating you? i do not understand? so you feel bad for something? surely your own guilt etc would make you feel punnished enough without this person adding their condemnation?

    i dunno.
    i think you could do a whole lot more with your idea than you have.
    | Posted on 2007-11-07 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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