I really enjoyed this poem. It made me think of the coming together of others. Like if everyone just sang an unsung birthday song to someone maybe the would be a better place. I don't think that was what you were heading for but, that's what it made me feel.
it was good! i kinda pictured(?) the song as a fast-paced smiths tune w/ elements of the arcade fire. i liked the words. that sounds very dumb. no, seriously, "You woke me from a dream
with just a shadow
So I rose my glass to you at midnight
I've never been able to make those pretty crystal glass
noises but I did tonight"
were really great. and you had a really different but catchy rhyme scheme. i sung it in my head as i read it. good tune!