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    dots Submission Name: Between Life and Death (fun)dots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
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    Words: 312
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I run from the light,
    and hide from the dark.
    (I cant stand happiness,
    but the darkness
    into which i am going
    scares me.)
    I have no home,
    no bite and less bark.
    (I have nothing)
    Life wants to kill me,
    Death wants to take me.
    (everythings against me)
    I'm stuck in this place,
    what might my fate be?
    (I can't be happy
    and i refuse to enter utter darkness)
    Always hunted,
    never the hunter.
    (never been able to push back)
    Always a coward,
    fear pulls me under.
    (always afraid,
    fear holds me down.)
    I've lost all I love,
    in self-pity I wallow.
    I have nothing left,
    I'm drowning in sorrow.
    (self explainatory)
    The sun brings me pain,
    night brings more fear.
    (I cant stand the light,
    but fear my darkness.)
    I will continue,
    for all I hold dear.
    Never will I quit,
    Never will I fall.
    (I wont give up)
    In spite of the world,
    I will survive all.
    (I'll live just for the hell of it.)
    Pain has no meaning,
    I will not be detered
    (I will keep going,
    even if I die inside.)
    Even in agony,
    I'll utter no word.
    (I wont give the satisfaction
    of crying out.)
    My silence is solid,
    'till the battle is won.
    (i will hold everything in)
    My end is nigh,
    the chase is now done.
    (it will soon be over,
    I'm not going to run
    from myself anymore.)
    I will fight back,
    the time is now come.
    (its time to end the pain)
    The steady beat of my heart
    blends to a hum.
    (my heart beats faster)
    Between Life and Death,
    I've run from this fight.
    My vengence is now,
    It ends tonight.
    (I've been alive,
    but I haven't been living.
    Now it will end,
    one way, or the other)




    Submitted on 2007-07-18 03:19:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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