how do you do that?
just come back and overwhelm my ability to comment lol.
your work has always stumped me.
the way you seem to so effortlessly create images and drag me into them so that i know exactly what it is you speak of...
i love the voice of this piece. its so wistful and longing and the grass is always greener [though actually, according to the red lobster dude on the little mermaid, 'the seaweed is always greener' ]
and what if we were all sunk and drunk enough to admit the state of the world and of ourselves...? would we achieve anything in admitting it...?
i guess... admitting is the first step to overcoming a problem or something...
AA... 12 steps... something...
i like the way you play with learning/school ideas. by wording it the way you have you make the reader yearn for an easier means of education. what you fail to mention is the fact that if you are not in a school in the ocean then you are usually bait or dinner...
but the idea that school is instinct is a good one... makes it seem less of a chore i guess.
i liked this so much i actually read the whole thing (most of the time i can read a few stanzas and find enough wrong to fill a comment..gag me)... it was interestingly put. congrats on a unique thought.
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