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    dots Submission Name: Highway 109dots

    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsHighway 109dots

    A lullaby is sung
    Mothers gentle touch
    Hush now.. go to sleep
    Don't cry little one
    Tell me stories later
    When you wake from your nap

    Lightning flashes
    As thunder roar on
    The beast gives his call

    Rain pours
    Hitting the roof
    As million droplets
    Turn into mother natures
    Sweet notes of natures beauty

    And now years past
    That child now grown
    Stands before his mother
    Tonight she holds back tears
    As she wraps her arms around him

    Lightning flashes
    As thunder roars
    The beast is back

    Rain pouring down
    As million droplets
    Tells a dark romantic
    Tale of what went down
    Tonight on highway 109

    When sirens are heard
    And the cops reports stated
    "An angel walks on highway 109"
    As the mother held her baby boy
    Not having a chance to say goodbye

    The story ends
    As the angel took his hand
    And told him not to worry now
    He vanished leaving behind a letter
    It simply read "I love you mother"
    And that, sadly was how it ended

    Submitted on 2007-07-18 15:13:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a very sad, moving piece...

    needs some corrections to smooth out the read...but hits the gut.

    | Posted on 2011-04-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      amazing. this truly showed the love of a mother for a son and the devastation of death. keep it up. seriously.
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by damienelizabeth | [ Reply to This ]

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