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    dots Submission Name: You hollow medots
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    Author: LadyMerlina
    ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60/93/58
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 545
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 488



    Description:
       Hollow is both erotic (in a dream)and painful (when awake)


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    dotsYou hollow medots
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    It was something you said in a dream.
    It was trapped in the corner of my mind,
    running through me all day.

    Then it hit me.
    "You hollow me", that's what you said.
    Like a strange way of saying you loved me.
    We were making love on cold tile
    Then you looked up at me and said it.

    "You hollow me".

    This dream awoke me empty and longing...

    You hollow me too.




    Submitted on 2007-07-18 17:52:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a strange but intriguing piece - I liked how Gadfly interpreted the "hollow" - interesting take on a relationship or yearning.

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      this title caught my eye. the piece is very deep for being so short bot the content is not lacking at all i see the difference of hollowing in the way your lover said and the way you said this is quite clever. I applaud you
    RATING: 4
    -debbie
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by debbieXY | [ Reply to This ]
      If I understand the story, the "hollowing" which is referred to is the bringing out of the inner person through intimacy. It was indeed a strange expression and presented in a quasi-third person dream angle, but the sentiment was clearly expressed.

    A very unique perspective.
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      I find this write to be very interesting
    The word hollow can have so many different meanings so it is a very clever word to use in your write
    I may be wrong but I took this as a write describing an intimate relationship
    Great Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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