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    dots Submission Name: tears of the seasonsdots
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    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    16/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 107/74/47
    Words: 310
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 71
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    dotstears of the seasonsdots
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    Wow I have nothing to say to you
    But my tears beg to differ
    Now is the time to move
    The years are so many
    Sometimes I still think about you
    When I see flattened money
    If I could travel back then
    To the days long ago when
    We knew our future was together
    It would always end up
    I’ll love you forever
    But now as another autumn passes by
    I will be strong for you
    And try not to cry
    But my tears still beg to differ
    Its 3 years today
    You were taken away
    And our souls were left to drift
    I love you
    I miss you
    I wish I could still hold and kiss you
    Feel your body near mine at night
    The winter winds bring cold
    But I refuse to grow old
    Wanting to reverse my life
    Sometimes I still see you
    If only dreams really did come true
    But my tears don’t agree with this lie
    We used to have adventures so grand
    It didn’t matter where we were
    We always walked hand in hand
    But that’s all over and done
    We sure had some fun
    Oh how I miss those times
    And when spring comes at last
    Wow time sure flies fast
    When you have no longer have someone to share it with
    So when the flowers bloom
    And the birds whistle their tune
    I will smile and pick a some for you
    Only the jubilant daffodil will do
    I will pick almost all of them
    Only for my love so true
    Summer is not my favorite season
    And I think we all know the reason I don’t like it is
    ‘Cuz its your birthday
    The days begin to extend
    The suns rays seem to never end
    I sit in our tree and wait for you to
    Ask me to dance




    Submitted on 2007-07-18 20:13:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i actually thought this one was really good! i liked the way you used the phrase "but my tears beg to differ" i think that you might have been able to go a little farther with it though. i thought the words at times may have been a little clichéd, but then again, love is not my favorite topic. it is important to you, and i thought that you made that very clear in this poem. also, i like how you used the seasons as a theme for your poem, but i don't especially like the title. anyway, i liked it. good job!

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    | Posted on 2007-07-18 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]



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