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    dots Submission Name: I dont need anything at alldots
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    Author: xSaraHx
    ASL Info:    17/Female/Earth
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 107/75/47
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
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    dotsI dont need anything at alldots
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    The need for attention is in high demand
    People will do whatever they can
    Just to get a passing glance
    They spend their whole lives
    Looking for a chance

    I don't need you to fill me
    I certainly don't need you to thrill me
    I can find my own way
    I don't need you to say
    What I don't to hear
    I really don't need you




    Submitted on 2007-07-19 00:12:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The need for attention is in high demand
    People will do whatever they can
    Just to get a passing glance
    They spend their whole lives
    Looking for a chance

    I don't need need you to feel me
    I certainly don't need you to thrill me
    I can find my own way
    I don't need you to say
    What I don't want to hear
    I really don't need you

    I think this is what you ment? If not sorry. Just trying to help. Even though this was short and sweet it got the point across.
    Thanks for sharing.
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2008-02-08 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this a lot too!!! it was really good and short...and sweet...in a wierd kinda way... anyway, it was really different, i liked how you switched from talking about people in general in one verse, then switched to a specific example in the second, it's like you proved your point or something. i sung-read it to like, wierd techno. you should totally make this an automic fifties song!
    | Posted on 2007-07-20 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it, it was to the point raw and relatable. I like it the way it is but I guess you could make it longer, you could really take this somewhere. However, at the same time I think the shortness of it is what I like about it cuz its to the point. keep up the great work!!!!!!

    Singlerose
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]


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