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    dots Submission Name: Dark And Deadly Nightdots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    18/f/aus
    Elite Ratio:    2.24 - 132/164/95
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 105
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 396



    Description:
       It Feels As Tho Im Walking Down A Never Ending Path
    and im ready to give up to the fate of the dark night


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    dotsDark And Deadly Nightdots
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    broken, crying, confused
    my life is at its end
    no longer and i going to try
    this time i wont mend
    walking down a path
    with no end in sight
    not a single person around
    just the cold and darkness of night
    walking alone no hopes or dreams
    just the bitterness of my life
    i give up, admit defeat
    to this dark and deadly night




    Submitted on 2007-07-19 03:21:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i would say this poem is pretty good
    you should use stronger words to grab the readers attention
    but other tthan that i think its good
    nice work
    | Posted on 2007-09-10 00:00:00 | by tiffaroox3 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very beautiful poem with short and sweet wordings. Well penned and flowing well. Poetically and lexically strong. I felt grief in this piece as the wordings really depict this.

    Tc
    Fsams
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by Fsams | [ Reply to This ]


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