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four corses of action


Author: debbieXY
Elite Ratio:    3.62 - 15 /12 /9
Words: 43
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Description:




four corses of action



faces
pictures
places
fixtures
materials physically weighing me down
connection
desensitization
protection
copulation
living my life with the girl with the frown
violence
blindness
silence
endless
rage and enticement withheld from my fists
boredom
depression
wisdom
rejection
worry and anxiety clouding my bliss




Submitted on 2007-07-19 05:01:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  basicaly describing life
I liked the words
They made me feel smart lol
desensitization
meaning?
and how do I say it for goodness sake
faces
pictures
places
fixtures
awesome ryhming
keep up the good work
xSaraHx
| Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by xSaraHx | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow this piece is different. 1 word for each line except the fifth line (each stanza rite). This one is kind of deep. Hmm it would even be more artistic if the fifth line is not that long. Well i thought you have some problems, cheers. Just smile when you feel sad, just laugh when you feel sad, feeling weird rite, but it would make you better. Gud luck 4 ya.

-David-
| Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]
  enjoyed def. i like the style more than anything word after word and then a sentence here or there. i think the first sentence could be worded better but hell overall i dig. wooo!
| Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]


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