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    dots Submission Name: An Elergy of Hopedots
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    Author: kingsley
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 100/59/46
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAn Elergy of Hopedots
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    They never saw life we did
    They never felt the pain of being born
    they were helpless little seed
    that were denied the right of been grown

    They are the shining little stars
    that might have brought light to our lives
    they are little strokes of luck
    that would have saved many when disater struck

    They came but barley stayed
    they were created but not kept
    that is the reason the sky`s habit of tears stayed
    these tears vowed to keep coming till the end of the world

    I hope you eyes rain when you see their pain
    i know that then you will have something to say
    say it to lovey heart and listen your conciense
    if it is the truth you will see GOD`S presence

    I hope that their story will be
    told as a part of our history
    i hope that their story will be as dark part of your memory
    i hope that we all work hard to deprive the world of this tragedy
    the juice of denying life is not worth the squezee




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      I really like the idea of this. I got what you were talking about as soon as the poem started, so thats a good thing. Yet i felt that the beginning was lacking. U had good imagery but i felt that it could have been better. The middle was my favorite part (it was nicely worded)and while the last stanza was ok, the last line offered a totaly different image form the rest of the piece that it sort of ruined it.
    | Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]


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