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    Author: Fadeintoreality
    Elite Ratio:    1.95 - 33/114/64
    Words: 55
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe glowdots
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    Luminescence dances on manicured grass.
    Flashes of light break and return
    in between split seconds of suppressed doubt.
    Blades glow a tortured jade hue
    under large windows traced with pine.
    Gazes from the moon at the heavenly luster,
    reach linen barricades.
    Walls that crush a shaking fašade
    conjure straggling memories meant to be forgotten




    Submitted on 2007-07-19 14:15:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the use of words, however I couldn't get an image in my head, with every new line seemingly changing. My small brain couldn't handle it, anyway. It was interesting nontheless.
    | Posted on 2007-07-20 00:00:00 | by Apple-Man | [ Reply to This ]


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