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    dots Submission Name: A RottenFetusdots

    Author: SingleRose
    ASL Info:    20/F/Phila
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 96/82/31
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsA RottenFetusdots


    Floating weightless in the womb
    of nonexistence
    contemplating the futility
    of resistance
    canvassing the map of is
    for the state of matter to be

    Submitted on 2007-07-19 15:40:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this sounds good. The flow is natural and the idea feels free and open to thought, i think a little more elaboration would make it amzing.
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by bloodsucker13 | [ Reply to This ]
      um ew
    sorry but that image made my guts churn
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by xSaraHx | [ Reply to This ]

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