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    dots Submission Name: Story dots
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    Author: Midnight Shadow
    ASL Info:    22/f
    Elite Ratio:    2.24 - 47/151/126
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsStory dots
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    there was this girl, lovely to see, had a story, to back up her blood stained tears, he left her all alone, now her cuts are so deep, shes running against time, can she survive, without the heart, he had torn out

    [chorus] :
    all she ever needed, all she ever wanted, was burned to the ground the night, he walked away, no love, all there is left is a tear stained story, covered in blood, with her pain tearing the flesh, blackening the heart, now she's fading away

    all alone, with sin burning her lungs and covering her eyes, shes screaming, not understanding, nothing can help her now




    Submitted on 2007-07-19 16:21:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    The character made my heart hurt.......
    | Posted on 2007-07-20 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]


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