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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Bytes: 903



    Description:
       I Miss The Way Things Used To Be
    We Broke Up And She Soon Replaced Me
    Proving To your Family Just How Much Better She Was Then Me..
    When i Did See your Family They Didnt Even Aknowledge My Prescence And It Hurt


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    i find myself here
    day after day night after night
    reading all your poetry
    and the words that changed my life
    never did i predict to be sitting here alone
    questioning all the words you said
    just wishing i did know
    what happend to us?
    what went wrong?
    i saw you the other day
    but from the moment i walked in the door
    i knew something was wrong
    your family didnt want me there
    i was clear to see
    i left your house soon after
    all alone and in tears
    i didnt do anything wrong
    not that it matters
    the people i thought i could rely on
    dont care for me anymore
    i cried the whole train trip home
    even making myself sick
    i dont know the point of this poem
    i dont know what to write
    all im trying to say is
    I MISS YOU IN MY LIFE




    Submitted on 2007-07-20 06:15:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know this doesn't make up for how your feeling, but no person is worth feeling that bad about. If you genuinely care about him, then its his fault for not being interested anymore. This is very clichéd, I know, but you'll find someone one day who'll treat you the way you deserve to be treated.
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    | Posted on 2007-07-20 00:00:00 | by Lord Bane | [ Reply to This ]


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