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    dots Submission Name: Shatter crackdots
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    Author: Waywarddaughter
    ASL Info:    17/f/Vt
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 72/52/22
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsShatter crackdots
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    mind says clack
    /shatter crack/
    slip down back like/
    sweat says sting/bring tears to-
    eyes say hi/Natural noise rever-
    berates says bounce says/
    push past, elbow way out past
    /head strong past/
    tongue red teeth white past
    /lips soft to clack/
    like mind to
    /shatter crack/
    slip down back like
    /sweat my words do go down to/
    bring tears to dry eyes to/
    say hi to never ever/
    look back because words-
    earth still spinning/
    because words still
    /spinning keep earth from/
    shatter crack/
    mind says/
    clack/and
    world slips like sweat
    down/our backs.




    Submitted on 2007-07-20 19:55:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What a [expletive/censored] beat poet you are. If Allen Ginsberg weren't dead he'd be proud.
    | Posted on 2007-08-06 00:00:00 | by Melora | [ Reply to This ]


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