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It's True


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 76
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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For a friend that i don't speak to nemore


It's True



She moves right past me
Not a word is said
I feel her breathe on me
And I wish I were dead

She takes from me
All I ever cared for
And she leaves me alone
Broken on the floor

And it's true
it's true
I still think of you
I still wonder how you are
& Even though ur at afar
It's true
it's true
I still wonder how you are





Submitted on 2007-07-21 00:51:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Short and descriptive lines portraying a depth of feeling that is only completely understood by someone that's gone through the same misery of having a friendship 'go bad'...

Very well written!
| Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]


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