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    dots Submission Name: End Of My Fairy Taledots
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    Author: AngelinDisguise
    ASL Info:    23/F/AUS
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 133/171/100
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1287



    Description:
       Not Finished
    I Know I Can Improve It
    I Just need To Find The Right Words
    This Isnt A Woe Is Me Poem This Is To Remind Me Of All The Good Times I Shared With Him


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    dotsEnd Of My Fairy Taledots
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    walking along the beach
    with our toes is the sand
    it was all so beautiful
    you were my perfect man

    laying beside you
    staring into your eyes
    believing every word you said
    you never told me a lie

    falling asleep in you warm arms
    i knew i was safe
    that i wouldnt come to harm

    believeing in you
    giving you my trust
    i gave you everything
    even my heart

    watching you cry
    something i didnt like
    kissing away your tears
    giving you back your life

    reading your poems
    with tears in my eyes
    the truth you told
    about wanting to die

    watching a movie
    in the dead of night
    cuddling in
    and you holding me tight

    laying on your chest
    not making a sound
    listening to your heart beat
    not wanting it to end

    your gentle kiss i miss the most
    made me smile
    made my heart melt

    your the only guy ive ever met
    that can make my heart beat
    fast and slow

    no matter where you were in the world
    i never felt alone

    its all over now
    the end of my fairytale




    Submitted on 2007-07-21 03:23:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked this piece as well , it has alot alot of emotion in it. but heres a little problem though ( and i make it constantly) it you ryhme it some stanzas and not at all in others, it throws of the flow juss a litttle bit. but flow doesnt matter to me really, its what you get out of the words. and i felt it alot. great piece.

    dark romeos girl
    | Posted on 2007-07-22 00:00:00 | by DrkRomeo_sGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem, its so sad and you can tell you really loved this guy. this was truly a good poem keep up the good work. Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]


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