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    dots Submission Name: Old firenddots
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    Author: Thinkingofyou
    ASL Info:    18/f/The sunny state
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 283/423/132
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 1096
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 692



    Description:
       It's 8:16 in the morning and I got to thinking, what if I were to go back to WA and just drug all my friends and have my way with them? LOL. JayKay.


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    dotsOld firenddots
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    Lets go to lunch.
    I'll order first.
    I'll have a cup of trust and a bowl of todays confidence.
    She'll have a large sweet lie with a lemon on the side.
    Bring her a plate of self discovery too.
    We'll eat and drink until we find ourselves.
    Wrapped up in this lie we both believed.
    She'll go to the bathroom and I'll sink back into my seat.
    I'll cross my fingers hope to die,
    I'll dissolve a roofie in her lie.
    This meeting wasn't to see how she was.
    I just wanted for you to read the pun.
    Everybody needs to get laid.
    And now she's dressed up like a maid.




    Submitted on 2007-07-21 07:17:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well I like the Idea of this poem
    and I like the way you say we need to get laid.
    because we do. the world is so up-tight.
    So when and If you do, write something about
    after glow.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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