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    dots Submission Name: The dreamdots
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    Author: aNNmARIE
    ASL Info:    20/female/ unknown
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 85/50/19
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 142
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 354



    Description:
       This poem is pretty self explanatory.....I had a dream that a loved one had died......(go figure:))


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    dotsThe dreamdots
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    The other night I had a dream,
    I dreamt that you had died.
    "PLEASE come back to me," I cried.
    Awake now I realized,
    that you had not died
    I held you tight
    with all my might
    you were oblivious to my weeping sight
    For on this night...
    I dreamt you died
    and still......I cried




    Submitted on 2007-07-21 10:25:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I quite liked this poem... it's got a very good jive and it's very rythical... the only really problem I had with this poem was

    "I dreamt that you had died.

    "PLEASE come back to me," I cried.

    Awake now I realized,

    that you had not died."

    The last word of every phrase just didn't flow to me. The words just seemed really elementary put together. Other than Thgat this poem is very good. Unlike other poets on this site you used correct punctuation and spelling. That's always a plus

    Hope to hear from you soon
    Britt
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by CaughtRedhanded | [ Reply to This ]


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