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    dots Submission Name: Forgettingdots
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    Author: BloodtornAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/inyour wildest dream
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 21/28/43
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 1310
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsForgettingdots
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    Faster,
    A little more speed,
    I want to go faster,
    I want the wind.
    Faster,
    A little more give,
    just enough,
    to make the wind rush.
    Faster,
    A little less drag,
    pull forward,
    So the wind feels good.
    Faster,
    I want to win this race,
    not real,
    my own personal race.
    Faster,
    A little more push,
    then maybe,
    it won't hurt so bad.
    Faster,
    the wind rips at my hair,
    head high,
    how'd I end up here?
    Faster,
    It's not my place anymore,
    turn back,
    I'm not ready to face the past.
    Faster,
    speeding away from memories,
    they can wait,
    at least till I win my race.




    Submitted on 2007-07-21 15:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I actually REALLY like this. Its one of those pieces you you want to keep reading. And I'm sure a lot of people can relate to it, past memories. I know I can. Its like you need to get away before you can go back. Or..something. You don't need to change anything about this. Good job

    --inkpen.

    p.s- sorry if this is weird but your picture slightly resembles amanda bynes. lol
    | Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]


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