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Submission Name: Forgetting dots

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Author:	BloodtornAngel
ASL Info:	21/F/inyour wildest dream
Elite Ratio:	2.47 - 21/28/43
Words:	107

Class/Type:	Poetry/The pain inside
Total Views:	1310
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	785

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Forgetting dots

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Faster,
A little more speed,
I want to go faster,
I want the wind.
Faster,
A little more give,
just enough,
to make the wind rush.
Faster,
A little less drag,
pull forward,
So the wind feels good.
Faster,
I want to win this race,
not real,
my own personal race.
Faster,
A little more push,
then maybe,
it won't hurt so bad.
Faster,
the wind rips at my hair,
head high,
how'd I end up here?
Faster,
It's not my place anymore,
turn back,
I'm not ready to face the past.
Faster,
speeding away from memories,
they can wait,
at least till I win my race.

Submitted on 2007-07-21 15:14:29 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I actually REALLY like this. Its one of those pieces you you want to keep reading. And I'm sure a lot of people can relate to it, past memories. I know I can. Its like you need to get away before you can go back. Or..something. You don't need to change anything about this. Good job

--inkpen.

p.s- sorry if this is weird but your picture slightly resembles amanda bynes. lol
| Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]

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