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    dots Submission Name: Boysdots
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    Author: BloodtornAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/inyour wildest dream
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 21/28/43
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/I hate you
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    dotsBoysdots
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    They will always tell me I'll get over my pain.
    They'll try jokes and fill me with fleeting happiness.
    It's useless
    I am hurt
    I am broken into pieces
    Lost

    They loved me and broke me. Tell me.
    Perfectly fine

    They twist my word. Then shove them down my throat.
    They take my love to comfort themselves and forget me.
    They use my heart to break others
    Then throw me aside, like old furniture
    Leaving nothing

    I want to scream and cry and show them
    real pain

    Well you win, hate me
    you wanted to see me hurt
    I played your game
    I was your pawn
    your safety blanket
    I was yours




    Submitted on 2007-07-21 15:22:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can only assume that this comes from real life experiences. Hopefully someday karma will come around the corner and smack them in the face. This piece is rather good. I like the way it flows. Its got a nice structure to it, it makes it more interesting. "I was yours" < my favorite part is the end. Those lines seem all too familiar. Good job, keep it up. ;)

    --inkpen
    | Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]


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