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    dots Submission Name: God's Dogdots

    Author: BloodtornAngel
    ASL Info:    21/F/inyour wildest dream
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 21/28/43
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsGod's Dogdots

    Break my heart,
    hurt my soul,
    I'm once more bloody,
    it's getting old.
    I'm off of love,
    I'm giving up,
    my dreams are shattered,
    I have no hope.
    'Lets just be friends',
    'there's someone better',
    it's such a headache,
    and tears make it worse.
    God unforgiving,
    laid on me a curse.
    Tortured forever,
    brought down day by day.
    What will you,
    my dark angry demons,
    burn me forever,
    and never grant heaven.
    If there's a Hell,
    I'm certain I'm in it,
    and I'm screaming obscenely,
    because he isn't.
    Because the one who lied,
    and stabbed me in the back,
    is sitting like a dog,
    at God's right hand.
    When he should be the one,
    suffering for what he has done.

    Submitted on 2007-07-21 15:30:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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