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    dots Submission Name: Hiccuppppdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHiccuppppdots
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    I try to fall
    this sensation is closely overwhelming
    some one
    catches me


    it's no good to get that far, and come back
    it's not fair to last that long, then fade away

    when I walk there's always a stick in road.
    when I walk there's always a rock
    a clock
    a cock
    a
    doodle doo
    doodle dee

    dum
    dum
    dumb

    and
    in addition to that, it pisses me off that I have to pick them all up
    when I was told that this is the better path to take, and was much under the impression that.
    While I was busy being busy
    it would be okay




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      yeah, i think this is about passing through life on the road that they tell you to take but coming across crazy obstacles anyway -- even though it is the road they told you to take or something. if that's so -- then it was cool. i like the little dum dum dumb part a lot. i dunno why, it just seemed to stick.
    | Posted on 2007-08-10 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems like it's going to be one of those dreamy, almost reminiscy type thing that you do...and then you throw in this part and cracked me up...

    in addition to that, it pisses me off that I have to pick them all up
    when I was told that this is the better path to take, and was much under the impression that.
    While I was busy being busy
    it would be okay
    | Posted on 2007-07-23 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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