Fire and Caves by TheStillSilence

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Submission Name: Fire and Caves dots

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Author:	TheStillSilence
ASL Info:	16/f/eye of the tornado
Elite Ratio:	5.46 - 156/75/29
Words:	103

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	167
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	649

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Fire and Caves dots

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She speaks ill;
with venom words
iced in acid
and spiced with betrayal and angst

Spitting fire at every cloud that passes by
She is dubbed 'dragon lady' and isolated in a cave others have built around her

And her comes the brave knight
dressed in shining armor
ready to slay the dragon.

Her fire slings out
but his armor is fireproof
and he cuts her head off;

Now she's left a dragon without a head,
she can no longer spit fire or venom;
all that she has left is her cave that others have built for her.

Submitted on 2007-07-21 18:15:37 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Poor dragon. I'm aware of the acutual meaning, of course it is not really about a dragon but instead about a 'dragon lady', but man that has to suck being stuck without a head. I thought it was interesting. It paints a nice image. It is not something I would normally read but it is good. Nice wright ^-^
| Posted on 2007-08-29 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
Humm interesting imagery. I know some people that speak a lot of venom and should all be locked up in caves! I'm not quite sure about the last stanza though, seems a little off compared to the rest.
| Posted on 2007-07-29 00:00:00 | by silverfragment | [ Reply to This ]

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