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    dots Submission Name: Listen to my heartdots
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    Author: Shadow24968
    ASL Info:    16 Male
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 69/72/34
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 600
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1611



    Description:
       A little thing I came up with on guitar, compliments of Daniel's influence


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    dotsListen to my heartdots
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    -Chorus-
    Listen to my heart
    And you'll hear a beat
    Of sensual kindness.
    It's like listening to heaven
    Hearing the angels sing
    No cries of emotions.

    The world has torn us apart
    But released our angels.
    Death to all who oppose
    And respect to all who break it.
    No heaven or hell
    A god or a devil
    To save us all.
    A passionate stride
    Of hopes to hide
    From the fears of people.

    -Chorus-
    Listen to my heart
    And you'll hear a beat
    Of sensual kindness.
    It's like listening to heaven
    Hearing the angels sing
    No cries of emotions.

    The towns are ablaze
    Just two that remain,
    Leaving us empty and fragile.
    Once beautiful people
    Have now turned to ashes
    From a despair so painful.
    Our people are crazy
    No flowers on their graves
    They're all killing each other.
    Shatted hopes no remains.

    -Chorus-
    Listen to my heart
    And you'll hear a beat
    Of sensual kindness.
    It's like listening to heaven
    Hearing the angels sing
    No cries of emotions.

    -Guitar Solo-

    -Chorus-
    Listen to my heart
    And you'll hear a beat
    Of sensual kindness.
    It's like listening to heaven
    Hearing the angels sing
    No cries of emotions.

    Listening to my heart
    Is like hearing a beat
    From angels and devils.




    Submitted on 2007-07-22 06:28:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked this!!! The imagery was great, especially in the chorus. While the frequent referal to angels and devils works really well, i was confused with your message. First I get a sense of loneliness and dispare but sort of softspoken and then it turns 'ugly' if you will. Maybe its just me. Well great work anyway!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-07-29 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      I Agree With The Previous Comments
    Its Amazing And Id Love To Hear it With music
    Love Stacey
    | Posted on 2007-07-24 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]
      Think was wonderful! I would really love to hear it played to the music. You do have a gem here. Great work!
    | Posted on 2007-07-23 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is an amazing write. Although I think i'd like it better hearing it sung and the music with it. but don't get me wrong reading it was great. the words fit wonderfully together everything flows nicely! so when you and your friend preformed this ... who did vocals?

    anyhew great job once again hope to hear from ya soon

    ~!*Jackie*!~
    | Posted on 2007-07-23 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm... you're going to have to explain the words to me, because while they look and sound wonderful, I'm not sure they go with the message you are delivering, because I'm not even sure what the message it.

    Wonderful write, but I think you need to clean it up, and make the message a little bit easier to see around.

    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2007-07-23 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]


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