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    dots Submission Name: Mother: I'm Sdots
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    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       about my mother when we had stoped talking for 2 years.


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    dots Mother: I'm Sdots
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    Iím not the daughter I used to be
    but your not the monster I thought I could see
    in all actuality the monster was me.
    Thereís many things that should have never been said,
    to many fires that didnít need to be feed
    with to much silence and tears that were shed.

    The one person I trusted I felt had turned their back
    it was a devastating personal attack
    we scram and we yelled
    and in turn I completely rebelled
    when all I really wanted to do was cry
    I hated myself so much I wanted to die.

    You knew everything I could possibly tell
    little did the world know I was living in hell
    I wish I could have just said Iím sorry instead
    of living depressed surrounded by my own bloodshed.
    I was blind and upset
    and with my life I played Russian roulette,
    in your absence, but I learned to cope with lies
    shielded by a person creating my demise.

    You werenít the person I loved anymore
    nor were you the person I had adored
    I was scared and alone in my mind
    funny how your own head can keep you so confined.
    I craved your attention hoping youíd return
    because this person you were was cause for concern.


    Iím not the daughter I used to be
    and your not the monster I thought I could see
    in all actuality the demon was me.
    I'm very sorry!!!!







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      This is so painful and so from the heart. It has a lot of meaning and could only be written by who's been there..it's funny how we tend to hurt always that someone who's the closest..in actuality, that someone should be the most treasured.

    A good write. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2007-07-24 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! gothicgirl, this is written in a really nice manner, and I can guess it was also a very hard revelation for you to make.
    Ii guess what I am trying to say is, I love it!
    nice work
    | Posted on 2007-07-24 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      "funny how your own head can keep you so confined." Favorite line. Because it's so true. I really liked this, it had a lot of good and bad emotion. Keep writing! - Devon.
    | Posted on 2007-07-23 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]


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