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    dots Submission Name: Mind Wastedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMind Wastedots
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    a ferocious piece of mind waste lay splattered on the floor
    Derricko picked it up with a small scientific vile
    and the result of this was a glass piece full of greenish bile

    phoooah
    the drum rolls
    a thicker tickle plaque sticks to the roof of my mouth, makes it black

    once I had a bit of heartburn with a side of mustardstick
    it tasted like shit, but, then again, I can't remember much except the mustard
    and if I forget again.
    It won't matter
    because I get to
    watch a cool movie
    that I haven't seen much of before




    Submitted on 2007-07-23 14:17:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      quite bizarre and funny.
    I love the flow and the rhyme.
    I really enjoyed this piece of


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    | Posted on 2007-10-19 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      cool . . . it was good. i got my own meaning from it. i'm not good at breaking down poetry and stuff -- but i enjoyed reading it and got a laugh.
    | Posted on 2007-08-08 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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