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    dots Submission Name: The Mental Artdots
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    Author: Waywarddaughter
    ASL Info:    17/f/Vt
    Elite Ratio:    4.7 - 72/52/22
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Mental Artdots
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    In the concaves of her body,
    he melted into pools of sweat;
    the smells of cigarettes and coffee.

    It was the kiss
    of them falling inside each other.
    his hands on the small of her back,
    her arms around his waist.

    And she whimpered
    at his hot breath on her cheek,
    'I want you inside of me'
    was the litany in her head.
    around and around it went.

    His hands shook as he unbuttoned her dress,
    gazing at water rings left on tables;
    the mental art of fucking.


    They collapsed onto each other,
    exhausted from their efforts.
    entangled tongues
    their sweat mingled,
    on the sheets.
    on their lips.
    on their hands as they lay together,
    the white of snow pressed against,
    the fading fog on the window.




    Submitted on 2007-07-23 19:33:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ....................I think I need a cold glass of water.
    That paints passion ever so delicately.
    No complaints here.
    | Posted on 2007-07-25 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]


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