Way Long Ago When I Was Young -------------------------------------------
I was watching a home movie
Dont ever give my dad a camera :]
my mom was asking people if they voted for clinton
wow this makes me cry
my great gma is talking and standing and acting like in a way I did not know her
It makes me sad that I never knew her like she was in theses tapes
she got dimensia and I never really persued a relationship with her
Everybody looks os young and happy
things have changed alot
it makes me sad
My aunt and her long time bf are in the video too
They have suffered from drug problems
Its amazing to see the present being set up as it was the present
know what I mean?
My parents are so young and sweet with eachother
I hope my relationship or marriage will be a cute an sweet as theirs looks
They started off so poor and young but they had love and they didn't care about all that
yes they were goofy and super silly
and I'm sure it was hard sometimes and they struggled alot
but things worked out ok
I aspire to be just as they were
Wow The clothes are wacky and the hair is even worse
My cousins are still not all born
What has happend to my world?
why cant things be as they were?
I have just turned 2
I have a blonde mullet
and find myself wearing lots of polka dots and navy and white dresses
I just bought a navy blue dress with white polka dots from AE
maybe I'll wear it for my sweet 16
I sound just like my mom did
and she was only 19 or 20
My daddy looks so thin and strong
he has a mullet too
silly daddy his smile is beautiful
He looks so happy
before all the stress and worry took over
I sure was a sloppy eater
and I just reallized I am not weird for making random noises for no reason
even in public
I have been making myself heard from early on
loud laughtery screams of joy
for no particular reason
I got a xylaphone for my birthday
someone say Child Prodigy :]
My daddy told me he didnt mind me being a musician
I play with my new toy but I prefer using it as a drum
Wow I was Adorable
I still am
Im just older wiser
I talk better
even tho It was cuter then
now when I open my mouth I get told to shut it quickly or else
lol funny the way things turn out eh?
When I was born my dad said stuff like dude and smacked his gum and my moms glasses reached her forhead and she thought she was a teen queen superstar
If you know my parents you will quickly realize how things have drasticaly changed
My brother is being brought home for the first time
Im jealous yet eager to see him
Sometimes I think Im mean to him
cuz Im slightly jealous that he got all the attention and not me after having everyone to myself for a long time
I was the first born In a long time
First grandchild and great grandchild
but I think Im over it
Its all good kid
I'm holding my brother and admiring how cute he is
and Im actualy laughing
cuz my brother had a "funny shaped head"
he still does
Its so big it blocks out the sun
But thats ok
I still love him
and all of my family
They mean the world to me
1. You're still young. Change the title, otherwise it seems as though you're reaching for an authority that you do not require. Nostalgia is permitted without needing to distance yourself from the past.
2. Proofread before you post. It is hard to follow the flow of words when there are typos or poor punctuation.
3. Try breaking it into stanzas. It becomes bewildering.
4. Read it aloud, preferably to a friend. Poetry is as much about a flow of words and sounds as the images it encompasses. This is, again, where punctuation comes into play.
5. Try to bring it into a more cohesive piece. As it is, it rambles too often into sappiness and has no lasting impression.