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    dots Submission Name: Memories dots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       For my mother!!!!! I loved her for the short time she was here on earth, now she has heaven to roam!!!


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    Memories

    Memories I have of you are so little and few.
    Nevertheless, those few memories I have of you.
    I hold so close and dear in my heart.
    Even though they are pieces and parts.
    I often dream I knew you a little more.
    So I can have more of you, I could adore.

    I was hurt when you went on your way.
    I cried and begged for you to stay.
    The Lord heard my cries and told me why.
    I still didn't want it to be your time to fly.
    Your are my mother and I need you still.
    Even with time the pain will never heal.

    I think of you often and smile when I do.
    You are here with me always just me and you.
    All I do can do is close my eyes and say your name.
    The Lord relays it to me frame by frame.
    Even if it is in my dreams or my prayers.
    The Lord will always bring you there.




    Submitted on 2007-07-24 09:34:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can empathize with this peice of poetry
    I can truely feel the loneliness in your heart
    god be with you my dear

    | Posted on 2007-07-24 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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