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    dots Submission Name: death and luggagedots

    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1430
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    ----my Dad tells me today--....prostate something of another--he didn't come out and say he had Cancer but I fucking knew what he wasn't saying--He thinks it is for my benefit...th4e not telling me thing--FUCKING PURE BULLSHIT!! --why beat around the bush, WTF??? I am a grown man that can fix bad situations in ways beyond most can even comprehend-then again to be honest --the person I would be helping would have to believe that I can help him and in this case he lives and will die by the doctors fucking quacked bogus (often enough) decisions whether it to be opt for surgery when it isn't completely necessary or simply just have no idea wtf is wrong with you after seven trips to the emergency room or doctors offices or whatever (yes -fact-happened to me) Dumb useless motherfuckers go to school for 8 years after college and weren't able to tell me I had a broken fucking neck for a whole month of me telling them something is wrong with my nerves and something just wasn't right , I said things feel funny------Doesn't take a genius to say OK! We need to do an MRI on your spine and brain and neck--this is the answer you would have figured they would have told me to do but instead they did X-Rays on every part of my body/thousands of dollars later/plus I had no insurance--then they say ya know maybe...we should try an MRI....hmmmm these guys were fucking Good!!!--stupid/dumb bastards should have never started helping people ....if they simply just can't!

    -------------sorry about this slight rant, but those that know me --know that Doctors and I are worlds apart in what we believe to be the full list of solutions and what are actually the REAL problems.
    Personally I think Cancer is what will kill us all....not aids---Cancer is the real killer--and if you think , as they say there is no real cure for it---I feel so sorry for you, because there are cures, it is just not our time as a society to benefit from that particular deadly disease being cured--maybe our kids may have that benefit but not for a decade or two.

    (that last part is just a belief of my own and do not necessarily reflect the views of Elite or any of its affiliates!)     thank you


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    dotsdeath and luggagedots

    death and luggage

    recent calenders,
    bad memories,
    and why we all have to go on?
    without me
    like grains of sand,
    no longer in the hourglass.
    is no longer at hand
    and the end is nearing fast.
    Choosing headstones and acolytes.
    I bite my tongue and fight,
    uncertainty through each night
    avoid being scared,
    and dare death
    to cheat you
    and leave you with regrets.
    Drop the bags,
    and keep the good times you had
    always in your mind
    I wont let death scare the life out of mine!
    Get Well Soon Dad!


    Submitted on 2007-07-24 14:53:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      first off, i hope your dad gets well soon. cancer is cancer, its there and as sure as we breath, its still going to be there, cure or no cure. sickness and death are usually part of everyday life isnt it? its also what makes life so sweet and makes it worth living. my own father has diabetes and it may be hereditary, the sins of our fathers are always upon us, so to speak.

    as for this piece, it has good weight and seems pretty balanced. im not so sure about the last parts though. is it part of the piece? personally, i think the "get well soon" part kinda throws the whole piece off balanced a bit. you present a whole range of ideas, and generally speak to a lot of people. the get well part should be dedicated somewhere else outside the piece as it is a good piece.

    well thats my two cents.


    | Posted on 2007-07-25 00:00:00 | by Pietro | [ Reply to This ]

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