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    dots Submission Name: Heavenearthhelldots
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    Author: Vile Deception
    ASL Info:    20/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 23/29/26
    Words: 277
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHeavenearthhelldots
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    We池e in it.
    Heaven,
    Earth,
    And Hell.
    I知 holding
    My bare,
    Bluing knees
    To my chest.
    My hands
    Part of a
    Skittish cult.
    I知 just studying
    This world
    Without you.
    It痴 too
    Golden.
    There are
    Too many
    Remnants of
    The wild abandoned
    Path.
    I can feel
    These syringes
    Adorning my
    Hair.
    Sweet, sweet
    Liquid heroin
    For golden locks.
    I知 squelched
    In this bed
    Of extravagance.
    Our bed
    Filled with
    Linen-
    White
    Remnants.
    I always
    Surrendered,
    Foremost with
    My thighs.
    I値l never
    Walk with you
    Inside me.
    You knew that.
    Maybe I値l
    Just pretend to
    Sleep
    Forever.
    There was a
    Gap in your
    Love though,
    And the entire
    Room tilted.
    Along with the
    Earth.
    I want to be
    The mother
    Of a new
    Blue-grayness.
    I want my
    Offspring to
    Engulf.
    Our child,
    Which you
    Will never
    Remember,
    And in all
    Its opaqueness,
    Will be an
    Angel
    Among
    Storm clouds
    Of opium.
    I値l look for
    Your
    Starry constellation
    On earth.
    I値l point at it,
    In hopes
    That you値l
    See and come
    Back to us.
    Me,
    And your dying
    Baby boy.
    I値l tell the
    Sun to
    Fly away,
    So the stars
    Will always be out.
    I知 so
    Fucking
    Hopeful.
    It痴 hopeless
    To dissuade
    My miracle-
    Making mind.
    Those flowers,
    In the vase,
    You bought me
    Are like you:
    Dead,
    Rotting,
    And still smelling
    So sweet.
    I知 going too.
    Along with our
    Baby boy.
    We値l die in
    The morning.
    Because, Love
    This world is
    Far too golden
    Without you.




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