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    dots Submission Name: Unwanted Burdensdots
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    Author: EseanB
    ASL Info:    30/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    2.38 - 99/138/84
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 795
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    Description:
       A little personal poem revolving around my life, but it can be viewed religiously as well.


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    dotsUnwanted Burdensdots
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    How art thou, "Father"?
    Has thou missed me yet?
    Am I forgotten,
    Like ashes in the wind?

    Thou traded me,
    For a head full of lies.
    Thou treated me negatively,
    Like an unwanted burden.

    Thou used me and abused me,
    In the name of revenge.
    I was only born into this world,
    But it wasnít my decision.

    Thou may have been hurt,
    But not by my hand or mouth.
    I should not have to suffer,
    For thouís blindness and ignorance.

    Sacrifices and choices are always made.
    Not everyone has happy endings.
    Love is supposed to be unconditional,
    Not neglected and ashamed.

    My children will come back to me,
    Since here is where they belong.
    I will not allow them to be treated,
    Like unwanted burdens.




    Submitted on 2007-07-24 23:25:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this, it's like your telling your father how much he hurt you and what not and that you will never be like him to your kids. you can tell you really care for them. good write keep it up. hope life is going good for you. Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-07-25 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      ummmm ok....
    | Posted on 2007-07-25 00:00:00 | by AngelinDisguise | [ Reply to This ]


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