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    dots Submission Name: seasonsdots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Seasons

    Like the seasons is our love.
    It will begin to variegate.
    Spring buds of love start to maturate,
    Summer it will ignite it's revelation,
    Fall it changes it's coloration,
    Winter is when it turns obdurate.
    Like the seasons was your emotional state,
    You did not oppose the transition.
    Spring our love was a creation,
    Summer you enkindled the flames,
    Fall you made it fluctuate,
    Winter our love went inhibited.
    Like the seasons was our love,
    The changes I could feel.
    Spring I perceived its life,
    Summer I caressed its heat,
    Fall I apperceived the change,
    In the winter it now feels cold.




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      Comparing love to the seasons makes sense to me. I definitely could follow the progression. I would suggest spacing this poem into three stanzas, each beginning "Like the seasons..." My natural instinct was to pause and compare the three parts. I've always disliked the cold of winters (and realize not everyone feels this way). Having said that, my inclination to feel sadness with winter makes me appreciate the dispair in all three winter lines. Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-08-19 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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