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    dots Submission Name: The Seadots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Seadots
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    The Sea

    Unforgiving is this sea that I plow through in mind.
    Tossed about as if a tiny boat called Hope.
    Hope that most have, to live on forever.
    To reach the shore of a better place once known.

    Where the sun shines so bright, with sounds of laughter.
    As I float in this sea of Dark Despair, I become disorientated.
    Unable to focus on the present nor past
    Not sure what is real and what is not.

    Fearing to speak a word that might worsen all.
    This Hope will last forever in the storm.
    If only in this dream to stay safe
    To reach the real world would be awful.
    It would be destroyed by the storm.
    The Dark Despair is not located in the real world.
    It only exists in dreams of my Hope.
    Finding the shore would be but a mirage in my dream.

    Witnessing your sunshine and hearing your laughter
    It will never happen again, not here in the real world.
    Speaking of you will only bring the storm.
    I hold in the Dark Despair out to the light.
    Making the real world as dark and so stormy
    As my dreams.




    Submitted on 2007-07-25 08:30:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Poems like this are too good to be overlooked and and ignored. I don't know why people view a few and do not bother to comment on it. Is it Jealousy, Competition or just plain Laziness? Who Knows! lol! but anyway I like your work and feel like you have something important to say. I feel maybe it could be structured better in my opinion, but you do not have to take that as the gospel! lol! Sometimes too much structure can be a bad thing though, so you judge and weigh the matter out yourself.
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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