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    dots Submission Name: Just Wanted To Let You Knowdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 330
    Class/Type: Rant/
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       Fathers...spphhhh


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    dotsJust Wanted To Let You Knowdots
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    See, I still think of you.
    You still cross my mind
    Itís actually at the most random times possible
    But nevertheless you still have left an impression upon me

    And in no way am I trying to act as if it is a good impression
    You will always leave your mark with me

    And every time itís something different
    Itís something new
    Something else to handle
    To over come.

    But I just wanted to let you know
    You still cross my mind from time to time
    And I do not hate you
    For you are my Father.

    But nor do I like you.

    The day you "Yet Again Left Me Brokenhearted..."
    The day I told you I'd talk to you later
    As tears were running after one another down my cheeks...
    I hung up the phone...

    And for once Father.
    For once you left me hurt...broken... and brused
    But this time I was hurting and I had someone to hold me

    Someone to wipe those tears off my cheeks unlike yourself.
    Whom had caused them.

    And you want to know something else?
    I let him hold me...
    At first I fought back...
    Pushing
    Shoving
    Yelling
    But in the end...

    We were in a corner curled up together
    Rocking back and forth...back and forth...

    And forever I will remeber this
    Not because you finally became that father figured I know you can be
    Not because you we the one to hold me

    But simply because...
    I know I can no longer trust you..
    And for that matter have a father I have been so longing to have...

    You have hurt me
    You have disappointed me
    But most of all you have killed my soul... and broken the dreams of having you has my father...




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       I know the feeling of wanting needing your father, and him not being there. If you get the chance and felt like it I re-posted From a Child Unworthy. I wrote this to my dad. And I actually sent it to him.
    His response was to critique it line by line in some places and turn it around saying this and this and this are proof that you knew you betrayed me and you were wrong I did nothing and so on and so on.,

    I hadn't talked to my father for any reason what so ever for nine years, until a year ago august 2. I allowed my brother to give him my email a year ago february and I waited and I waited., Finally on my birthday I received a brief but nice email. So I hoped. The next email still has yet to be answered by me because I'm so pissed off and hurt I can't do it and do it right,.

    Father's all too often screw up, most time most of them realize it but there are others who missed that day in how to be school , and we pay the price for it.

    Have you given him this? You should. You deserve to be heard and he should hear the truth of what being unavailable cost!

    Please keep writing !
    | Posted on 2009-07-06 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice, you seem to write a lot about your parents, must really hate your dad, haha. Anyway, it was a good poem, lots of emotive writing and anger, anger makes the world stop dead, heheh. Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-07-30 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]


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