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    dots Submission Name: Sun & Moon Meetdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 663
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 598



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       Dedicated to my Celtic King ~*~
    Listening to the Beatles - "Come Along"

    remember; "IT's" easy 2 share love,peace,joy & smiles to share

    tif


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    dotsSun & Moon Meetdots
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    Meet me at the point
    where the Sun & Moon
    meet ~
    Fly through your mind
    no need for your
    feet ~
    Stretch away from
    searching shores...
    Become legend, myths
    And lores ~*~
    Allow all self
    to fade away ***
    Become a rainbow
    colored ray ~*~\
    Bete beauty
    of all view
    "IT's" for the ALL
    not just a few +
    Feel the rhythm
    cozmic song
    Time stands still
    come along ~~~~~~~~

    Selah




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      this could make for a very beautiful song, my wonderus beauty. I have a tat of a sun, moon and star. I think I will fav this 1. "Come together right now...over me." Beatles
    | Posted on 2007-08-04 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Very much like. I am quite aware that you are describing the basic feelings of love. Well, I am sorry this one is so short. I shall comment another, with more depth.
    | Posted on 2007-08-03 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      Just a couple things. When reading this i felt that the rhythm was a definite strength, but I have a few suggestions. I thought myths should have been moved a line down by lores. Cozmic =Cosmic. peace
    | Posted on 2007-07-31 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely dedication this is. Full of imagery, and full of life - just like yourself.

    This Celtic King guy is one heck of a lucky fella.

    Celtic King.
    | Posted on 2007-07-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Reading this makes one want to embark on this journey. To me, this piece kind of bounced along and had a joyous tone. So many times I've read pieces like this that are so corny, it's like pulling teeth to finish reading. I did truly like this one however. I like how unique you choose to be in your writing and composition. It's been awhile since I've been here, but I'm glad that I came back to read more of your work. I also have to say that there is nothing more romantic than the love affair between the sun and the moon. Very nice and I hope to read more very soon!

    Candi
    | Posted on 2007-07-25 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]


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