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    dots Submission Name: Romeo And Juliet???dots
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    Author: Jingles
    ASL Info:    19.m.canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.08 - 18/60/36
    Words: 415
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       She wrote a poem to me.
    And I wrote one back.
    I dno what Im asking for.
    Opinions on the poems I guess.
    And opinions on if you think we'll work out maybe....?


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    dotsRomeo And Juliet???dots
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    She wrote this to me.

    You told me now or never
    But should we take that risk?
    I think it's for the better
    We slow it down a bit.
    You told me you're afraid,
    Afraid to let me in
    But please just let me say
    You have to try again.
    We know the complications
    But we can't live in fear
    There's been some hesitation
    So why are we still here?
    If we're meant to be together
    Then trust me- this will work.
    We've been fighting more than ever
    There can't be room for hurt.
    You told me, "Don't give up"
    The same thing goes for you.
    When things start to get rough
    We know we'll make it through.
    I want you to know,
    I'll help you make an "us"
    And I'll give it a go
    But all I need is trust.
    I hope you know me well enough
    To know that I'm not pefect
    But even if we fall in love,
    We'll know that this was worth it.
    This will be the start,
    The start of something new
    And I know in my heart,
    That I'll always be true.
    ----------------------------------------------------------

    I wrote this back


    You say that in you're heart,
    True you'll always be.
    I did say now or never,
    Because theres no guarantee.
    The risk of slowing down,
    Is that time may change it's mind.
    The closer to me I let you get,
    You may not like what you find.
    Arguments arise, Anger starts to show.
    Complications are present,
    But I refuse to let you go.
    I know you well enough,
    To know you're perfect just for me.
    But the problem with remaining friends,
    Is the chance that, that's all we'll ever be.
    Problem after problem, flaw after flaw.
    Im terrified you'll turn around,
    And run away from it all.
    I blame this all on her,
    My fear and lack of trust.
    She took it all away from me,
    And left me with this pile of dust.
    But from the ashes I stand again,
    Ready to fall for you.
    But babe this isnt going to work,
    If you don't trust me to.
    Now or never, both powerful words,
    Our futures waiting to be made.
    How about now and forever?
    Theres no chance for us to fade.
    I've already fallen in love,
    Im scared to say so but it's true.
    The only problem facing us,
    Is you're scared to admit it to.


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    ||| Comments |||
      I think the poems were great full of true emotion..But a little advice from me wether you choose to take my words into consideration or not..I do think from reading this that the both of you are meant to be you both like each other greatly but are just scared to let each other in becuz of past experiences..A friend once told me that living in the past is unhealthy and to live for the now not the furture cuz who nows what it holds..But I'm gonna get going hope I helped!
    | Posted on 2007-07-28 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]


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